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Polecenie: You have just read a newspaper article called Why TV is bad for us. Write a formal letter to the editor.

* TV encourages us to be lazy
* It often gives us a trivial version of the news
* We do not use our brains when we watch TV
* TV teaches young people that the violence is always the best answer



Dear Editor,

I am writing in connection with Julie Nowak article "Why TV is bad for us " in last Friday's newspaper. I agree with many things Ms.Nowak wrote about.

First of all, Ms Nowak belives that TV encourages us to be lazy. I totally agree. When watching TV, we wasting time and not doing useful things.

Next, she says that it often gives us a trival version of the news. I think this is true because TV only give the short informations and sometimes they do not tell the truth.

Then, Ms Nowak says that we do not use our brains when we watch TV. However I do not agree with a this apinion because we use the brains when we watching game shows.

Finally, she suggest that TV teaches young people that violence is always the best answer. In my opinion, this is a good point because in television ore many films with violence and murder.

I wonder what other readers think about this issue.

Yours faithfully,
XYZ



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2009-12-02T20:14:42+01:00
Dear Editor,

I am writing in connection with Julie Smith article, "Why TV is bad for us" last Friday in the newspaper. I agree with many things Ms.Nowak wrote o.

First of all, Mrs. Smith believes that television encourages us to laziness. I totally agree. While watching television, we are wasting time and not doing useful things.

Then he says that often gives us a trival version of the message. I think it is true, because the TV only provide brief information, and sometimes do not tell the truth.

Subsequently, Ms. Smith says that we do not use our brain when watching television. However, I do not agree with that because we use apinion drain when watching game shows.

Finally, suggest that television teaches young people that violence is always the best answer. In my opinion, this is a good point, because in many television movies ore violence and murder.

I wonder what other readers think about this problem.

Yours sincerely,
XYZ
2009-12-02T20:25:19+01:00
1.Brakuje przecinków, po because, however oraz przed that itp.
2. I do not agree with this [a] [a - literówka, powinno być o]pinion, because we use the brains, when we watching game shows. - tutaj a jest zbędne.
3. W drugim zdaniu Ms Nowak bez kropki.
4. Moim zdaniem powinno być - I agree with many things, [that] Ms.Nowak wrote about.
5.TV only give[s] the short informations
6. because in television or[e - literówka?] many films with violence and murder. - konstrukcja kiepska - trudno zrozumieć o co chodzi, prawdopodobnie zdanie źle złożone. Zmieniłbym na -(..), because in television, there are many films with violence and murder.
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