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One time two girls : Lisa and Ania was riding a bike to school. Lisa is 17 years old, she is nice girl. She has got long, brown hair, big, blue eyes and she is very good pupil. She wasn’t never at school late. The second girl- Ania is 17, too. She has blond, straight hair. She goes to the class with Lisa.
Suddenly, they saw young boy in the window. He was scared and he was screaming, because house, (w którym się znajdował), was burning. The girl didn’t mull to help. They comed to a halt and wanted to help im. Ania wanted to prise a door, but she couldn’t.
-I’m going to look for a ladder. – say Lisa.
Few minuts later, she was bring about, step into boy and helped him get out. The boy was safe.
Finally, the young boy say about this situation in TV, and Lisa and Ania was invited to Warsaw. There they became a pots from Community Awards for Bravery. Lisa and Ania’s parents was very proud of children, and girls was very glad and happy, that can help another.

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2010-03-06T21:03:32+01:00
One time ago two best friends Lisa and Ania was riding a bike to school. Lisa is 17 years old, she is a very nice girl. She has got wavy long brown hairs, big, blue eyes and she is very good person. She always help people.She is always near when you need some help,and she treats everyone as equal. She always cry when she watch sad, romantic films. Some people say that he is stubborn. She wasn’t never late to school. The second girl Ania is 17, too. She has blond, straight hairs. She goes to the same class with Lisa.
Some day Lisa and Ania decided to go for a walk. It was quite late time. Sun was slowly disappearing from the sky. But Lisa had a feeling that someone will need her help.Ania wasn't very happy about her decisions, and she thought that Lisa gone a bit crazy. Suddenly they saw young boy in the window. He was scared and he was screaming so loud. His house was burning. The girls didn’t mull to help. They quickly run to a halt and wanted to help him. Ania was trying to prise the doors, but she couldn’t.
-I’m going to look for a ladder. – shouted Lisa.
Few minuts later, she came with the founded ladder. She quickly step into the boy window and helped him to get out. The boy was safe now.
Finally, the boy said everything about how the two brave teenagers helped him to get out of the burning house in TV. Lisa and Ania was invited to Warsaw. They became a two youngest girls from Community Awards for Bravery. Lisa and Ania parents was very proud of them, and girls was very glad and happy, that they helped someone. Ania couldn't believe that Lisa was alright. That she knew it, that this young boy would need her help.

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