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I was on holidays in an old hotel in France. This was really scary!
I was watching TV, and suddenly I heard weird sound, and then I saw a green light. I opened the door and I saw spaceship! Something shut the door and hit mine head. I felt smeel of blood...
I wake up in car. everywhere was dark. I went out from car. I wasn't having shoes, and I was feel wet ground. Suddenly I saw a light, and i was going there. I heard conversation. They spoke, that they will kill and eat me! I began ran, and suddenly mine friend, Susie, took me to her car and we drove to house. I came back to Polska. I never forget it!

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2010-03-22T16:50:47+01:00
I was on holidays in France and stayed in an old hotel. It was really creepy!
Once I was watching TV and suddenly heard a weird sound. Then I saw a green light. I opened the door and saw a spaceship! Something shut the door and hit my head. I felt the smeel of blood...
I woke up in a car. It was dark. I escaped from the car. I didn't have shoes and I felt that the ground was wet. Suddenly, I saw light and I was going there. I heard a conversation. They were speaking that they will kill and eat me! I began to ran and suddenly mine friend, Susie, took me to her car and we drove to the house. I came back to Poland. I will never forget it!
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2010-03-22T16:53:41+01:00
I was on holidays in old hotel in France. This was really scary!
I was watching TV, and suddenly I heard weird sound, and then I saw a green light. I opened the door and I saw spaceship! Something shut the door and hit my head. I felt smeel of blood...
I wake up in car. everywhere was dark. I leave a car. I didn't have shoes, and I was felt wet ground. Suddenly I saw a light, and i was going there. I heard conversation. They spoke, that they will kill and eat me! I began ran, and suddenly mine friend, Susie, took me to her car and we drove to house. I came back to Polska. I never forget it!

nie widze tu większych błedów ,ale te ktore poprawilam nie jestem pewna czy sa dobrze ale mysle ze tak :)
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